This is a record of a class blog at Edmund Hillary School, Auckland, New Zealand.
Monday 3 April 2017
Narrative Writing
We have been learning how to write interesting introductions that will hook the reader in. Here is an example of a piece that Jada completed. What do you think? We have added in the success criteria also, do you think she achieved this?
Kia ora Room 2, Hooked, line and sinker! I hope you carry on with the story Jada. What happens next? I am wondering about the tall silhouette. Where did you find your adjectives? Try these ones http://www.dailywritingtips.com/100-exquisite-adjectives/ Maria
Hey Maria, I am Jada from room 2 Edmund Hillary School. Proud to be at E.H.S as i have learnt so many things over the past 6 and 1/2 years at Edmund Hillary School. I will eventually finish my writing when i have the time to. Thank you for taking out time to come look and have a sneaky peek at our class blog much appreciated in many ways possible. I actually got these adjectives from my head it's like when i write stories i dont think about it i sometimes see it and the adjectives i use are just ways to describe how i see it thanks for asking...
Myself and Room 2 could hopefully visit the link you have kindly left for us...
Talofa my name is Conroy in Room 7 from Waikowhai Primary School. I really liked this post because I like how interesting the writing was. You used descriptive words and I really didn't know wgere the story would go. I also liked the picture that went with it. It matches the writing. If you want to visit my blog just type in wpsconroyc.blogspot.co.nz.
Hey Conroy, Thanks for commenting on our class blog, I was absolutely proud of myself for this introduction as it took me 2 days to write along with hard thinking. Writing is my favourite subject but i think it might change when i get to high school. I just think i can explain or express words better when i write. Once again or many more times thanks for commenting on our class blog...
I have a question for you, What is your favourite subject?
I'll definitely get round to commenting and taking a sneaky peek of your class blog and individual blog.
Hi there, my name is Joshua and I am a student in Waitemata at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like how you used many describing words and using your imagination. It made me think of the descriptive stories that I wrote at my school . Have you thought about writing about movies? If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://http://wpsjoshuac.blogspot.co.nz/
Hello , my name is Jacob and I am a student in Manukau at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like that narrative writing. It made me think of setting descriptions we have done in the past. Have you thought about doing some more, as I really like it?. If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://wpsjacobw.blogspot.co.nz.
Hello, my name is Bilal and I am a student in at Te Wako Ako, WPS School. I really like how you put lots of describing words in your narrative writing . It made me think of writing my narrative writing I thought it was really fun to write narrative because you get to write about anything. Have you thought about adding more sentences. If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://bilal@waikowhai.blogspot.co.nz.
Hi, my name is Sylvia and I am a student in Waikowhai primary school, I really enjoy reading your story, it is really interesting and my favourite part in the story was the end, maybe next time you could add in what will happen next, it reminded me of when we did our creative writing, if you like to see my learning my blog is at http://wpssylviah.blogspot.co.nz/
Hello, my name is Stevie-lee and I am a student in Te Waka Ako at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like how you used a lot of detail into your writing and descriptive language added in. This story really made me think like I was in your story. I think next time you could make another story to post on your individual blog. if you would like to visit my learning blog this is it:
Hello my name is Jaeda and I am a student in Te Waka Ako at Waikowhai Primary School.I really loved how you added lots of detail in your narrative writing...Maybe next time you could add some more paragraphs please. If you would like to see my blog type in this Jaeda@waikowhai primary school-blogger
Kia ora Room 2,
ReplyDeleteHooked, line and sinker! I hope you carry on with the story Jada. What happens next? I am wondering about the tall silhouette. Where did you find your adjectives? Try these ones http://www.dailywritingtips.com/100-exquisite-adjectives/
Maria
Hey Maria,
DeleteI am Jada from room 2 Edmund Hillary School. Proud to be at E.H.S as i have learnt so many things over the past 6 and 1/2 years at Edmund Hillary School. I will eventually finish my writing when i have the time to. Thank you for taking out time to come look and have a sneaky peek at our class blog much appreciated in many ways possible. I actually got these adjectives from my head it's like when i write stories i dont think about it i sometimes see it and the adjectives i use are just ways to describe how i see it thanks for asking...
Myself and Room 2 could hopefully visit the link you have kindly left for us...
Kia Ora
Jada
Talofa my name is Conroy in Room 7 from Waikowhai Primary School. I really liked this post because I like how interesting the writing was. You used descriptive words and I really didn't know wgere the story would go. I also liked the picture that went with it. It matches the writing. If you want to visit my blog just type in wpsconroyc.blogspot.co.nz.
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DeleteHey Conroy,
DeleteThanks for commenting on our class blog, I was absolutely proud of myself for this introduction as it took me 2 days to write along with hard thinking. Writing is my favourite subject but i think it might change when i get to high school. I just think i can explain or express words better when i write. Once again or many more times thanks for commenting on our class blog...
I have a question for you, What is your favourite subject?
I'll definitely get round to commenting and taking a sneaky peek of your class blog and individual blog.
Kind Regards,
Jada
ki ora, this is an amazing piece of writing, it really hooks you.to be BTB check grammer.but other wise it is amazing thanks from caitlin and sahara
ReplyDeleteHi there, my name is Joshua and I am a student in Waitemata at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like how you used many describing words and using your imagination. It made me think of the descriptive stories that I wrote at my school . Have you thought about writing about movies? If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://http://wpsjoshuac.blogspot.co.nz/
ReplyDeleteHello , my name is Jacob and I am a student in Manukau at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like that narrative writing. It made me think of setting descriptions we have done in the past. Have you thought about doing some more, as I really like it?. If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://wpsjacobw.blogspot.co.nz.
ReplyDeleteHello, my name is Bilal and I am a student in at Te Wako Ako, WPS School. I really like how you put lots of describing words in your narrative writing . It made me think of writing my narrative writing I thought it was really fun to write narrative because you get to write about anything. Have you thought about adding more sentences. If you would like to see my learning, my blog is http://bilal@waikowhai.blogspot.co.nz.
ReplyDeleteHi, my name is Sylvia and I am a student in Waikowhai primary school, I really enjoy reading your story, it is really interesting and my favourite part in the story was the end, maybe next time you could add in what will happen next, it reminded me of when we did our creative writing, if you like to see my learning my blog is at http://wpssylviah.blogspot.co.nz/
ReplyDeleteHello, my name is Stevie-lee and I am a student in Te Waka Ako at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like how you used a lot of detail into your writing and descriptive language added in. This story really made me think like I was in your story. I think next time you could make another story to post on your individual blog. if you would like to visit my learning blog this is it:
ReplyDeletehttp://wpsstevieleew.blogspot.co.nz/
Hello my name is Jaeda and I am a student in Te Waka Ako at Waikowhai Primary School.I really loved how you added lots of detail in your narrative writing...Maybe next time you could add some more paragraphs please.
ReplyDeleteIf you would like to see my blog type in this
Jaeda@waikowhai primary school-blogger